Your doing really well. I love the story and the art. The first panel made me pause though. I had to go back and reread the last page to figure out the conversation flow. Again very good comic.
Yeah, the order of the word bubbles in the first panel is kind of unclear. One tends to read the higher bubbles first, so it took me a moment to realize that “Oh! Nikki’s bubble is supposed to be read first!” Nice job otherwise. Poor Pita. She was looking forward to having a slumber party and everything. ^,^
Poor Pita! I could help her out. (Trying not to drool on the keyboard!) But I’d have to get INTO the comic, or she’d have to get out into the ‘real world’. Oh well, such is life….
I think I’m in love with Pita(Haruhi Suzumiya is one of my new fave anime shows)… now if only she’d lose the pigtails, she’d look a lot better.
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Poor Nikki, sleep well 🙂
//HSishi
Your doing really well. I love the story and the art. The first panel made me pause though. I had to go back and reread the last page to figure out the conversation flow. Again very good comic.
Thanks for the words of encouragement alchemar. 🙂
I appreciate the comments and feedback from others as well -both posted and emailed. -TK
Yeah, the order of the word bubbles in the first panel is kind of unclear. One tends to read the higher bubbles first, so it took me a moment to realize that “Oh! Nikki’s bubble is supposed to be read first!” Nice job otherwise. Poor Pita. She was looking forward to having a slumber party and everything. ^,^
So far this is a great story and the art is wonderful. Keep up the great work.
Ahh, Nikki, it must be hard being so desired!
Thanks for pointing out the error with the speech bubbles in the first panel. I made a quick fix. -TK
Poor Pita! I could help her out. (Trying not to drool on the keyboard!) But I’d have to get INTO the comic, or she’d have to get out into the ‘real world’. Oh well, such is life….
I think I’m in love with Pita(Haruhi Suzumiya is one of my new fave anime shows)… now if only she’d lose the pigtails, she’d look a lot better.