I just found your comic on topwebcomics.com, and I’ve just finished reading it from the beginning.
So far, it’s not bad. The art is amazing. The details blow me away, but it’s still awkward in places. I’ve noticed how the outlines of the characters are more pronounced than the outlines of anything else, which makes the characters look a little disconnected from the scene. I’m not much of an artist, so maybe there’s a reason for this that I don’t know about.
I might not be an artist, but I am a writer, and while the story is very interesting, you’re writing is very awkward at times (especially at the beginning). You’re dialoge doesn’t feel natural half the time and sometimes it seems that you’re using flowery prose for the sake of sounding dramatic. The story, the art, and (I’ll admit it) the nudity all make up for the awkwardness of the writing. Still, I am impressed with this comic so far and I think I’ll continue to read it.
And a happy birthday, sir! Hope you’re having a good one! Eat, drink, be merry — and then get right back to Nikki!
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Haha. Kib is such a nitwit. Lol. I love the backstory. Cant wait for the next page.
Thinking about that last panel makes me wonder if intelligence is inversely proportional to the amount of clothing worn.
I just found your comic on topwebcomics.com, and I’ve just finished reading it from the beginning.
So far, it’s not bad. The art is amazing. The details blow me away, but it’s still awkward in places. I’ve noticed how the outlines of the characters are more pronounced than the outlines of anything else, which makes the characters look a little disconnected from the scene. I’m not much of an artist, so maybe there’s a reason for this that I don’t know about.
I might not be an artist, but I am a writer, and while the story is very interesting, you’re writing is very awkward at times (especially at the beginning). You’re dialoge doesn’t feel natural half the time and sometimes it seems that you’re using flowery prose for the sake of sounding dramatic. The story, the art, and (I’ll admit it) the nudity all make up for the awkwardness of the writing. Still, I am impressed with this comic so far and I think I’ll continue to read it.
Wow. Top twenty ranking! Nice!
And a happy birthday, sir! Hope you’re having a good one! Eat, drink, be merry — and then get right back to Nikki!